2020北京朝阳区高三英语一模讲评 写作-情景作文.下 23张PPT

2020朝阳一模情景文讲评1 描图策略 2 审题构思 3 增补细节 CONTENTS 目 录描图策略01Direct vs. Indirect How do cultural differences influence sentence structures? Attachments Tree Main Clause Bracelet connecting the beads v① v② v③ v④ 一眼看穿 层层递进Individualism vs. CollectivismWhat makes a proper main point?  Accurate 拼写及语法准确 Pay special attention to the spelling and the grammar. We diccused about making a vedio to record our experiences at school. √ We discussed making a video to record our experiences at school.  Easy to find 位置好找 Put the main point in the very beginning of each paragraph.  Appropriate 表述得体（英语树状结构 ） Organize your ideas in a western way.. 要点需确定核心动词：1）人物分组 2）确定交互动作 Key verbHow to describe a picture? (5W1H) when, where, who, what, why, how审题构思02 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，微 笑看“英语园地”写一篇短文，讲述你在这个寒假居家自主学习的过程。 2020朝阳一模 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，微 笑看“英语园地”写一篇短文，讲述你在这个寒假居家自主学习的过程。 2020朝阳一模 看时间、定时态看内容、定变量 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，微 笑看“英语园地”写一篇短文，讲述你在这个寒假居家自主学习的过程。 2020朝阳一模 制定计划 执行计划 沟通交流 学习收获 Who did what?  Key verb! made a (detailed) study plan started learning as scheduled/carry out the plan had on-line classes 或 communicated with … achieved a lot and was praised by parents构思：文章结构 I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous learner. At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan. I first listed the learning tasks for the following days and then made plans in great details to ensure that they are practical and feasible. Then I started learning as scheduled. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirits every day. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly. Whenever I met with difficulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the Internet. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and gained more confidence in weak subjects. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self-discipline. I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated, which I believe will have a far-reaching influence on me. 2020朝阳一模标范 I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous learner. ①At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan. I first listed the learning tasks for the following days and then made plans in great details to ensure that they are practical and feasible. ②Then I started learning as scheduled. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirits every day. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly. ③Whenever I met with difficulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the Internet. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way. ④At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and gained more confidence in weak subjects. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self- discipline. I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated, which I believe will have a far-reaching influence on me. 主人公做了什么？ 收获？变量 时 间 线 动 作 线 升 华 线 时间延展—辐射作用大作文常见结构 衔接 要点 心情、结果 衔接 要点 心情、结果 衔接 要点 心情、结果 衔接 要点 心情、结果 时 间 线 动 作 线 升 华 线 分段： 4-5段为宜 1. 盖帽 (2) 2. 图1 (3) 3. 图2 (5) 4. 图3 (5) 5. 图4+升华 (3+2) Time + Who did what?+Gain/Change?增补细节032020朝阳一模 制定计划 made a (detailed) study plan 1. 量体裁衣 take my learning habits into consideration/account 2. 攻坚薄弱 prioritize the subject that I struggle with 3. 有效切割 break down large projects and tasks into bite-sized tasks//manageable chunks 4. 劳逸结合 strike a proper balance between study and rest/relaxation 目标：to study more efficiently/to manage time more efficiently 心情/结果：be ready/bursting/expectant to put my schedule into practice 确定首尾 Why? How did you feel?2020朝阳一模 目标：要坚持完成计划 to stick to/carry out/implement the plan 执行计划 started learning as scheduled 或carry out the study plan 1. 时钟的作用分割画面意义 自主 vs. 互动交流 2. 事件发展人物变化 一帆风顺 ？稳步提升？克服问题 结果：完成计划；心情：be satisfied with the great progress made 主人公目标？阶段成果？心情？2020朝阳一模 直线上升 Then I started learning as scheduled. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirits every day. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly. 曲线上升 ① At first, I could hardly resist the temptation of TV and the Internet//I found it hard to stay away from many distractions. ② However, with the goal set in mind/with the study plan stuck on the wall constantly reminding me of my goal, I tried hard to stay focused/stick to my plan. ③ As time passed by, I became more and more focused and efficient. 点出让自己克服困难的核心做法 遇到困难 解决问题、实现个人成长2020朝阳一模 吃透图片言外之意 Following my plan, I attentively reread some textbooks. With more time to digest and reflect on the knowledge, I gradually figured out the connection between many key concepts and got a clearer picture of the subject. 引入对比、挖掘本质2020朝阳一模 沟通交流 had on-line classes 或 communicated with … 1. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way. //which effectively facilitated my learning. 2. I took full use of the convenient on-line learning apps and communicated a lot with my teachers and classmates. tool  facilitate your study 网络媒介、老师、同学 目标：答疑解惑；成果：解决了问题，心情：不再迷茫、焦虑2020朝阳一模 沟通交流 had on-line classes 或 communicated with … 老师答疑解惑 unravel puzzles 1. Whenever I met with difficulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the Internet. 2. Under the patient guidance of my teacher, I quickly figured out the parts I was weak in/at and learned the corresponding measures to fix them. 3. Teachers quickly pointed out/pinpointed the crux of the problem that had long been perplexing me and patiently helped me figure out the solutions to it. 确定问题找到方法2020朝阳一模 沟通交流 had on-line classes 或 communicated with … 相隔很远，但心在一起 ① Though far away, our hearts were together. ② The warm smiles and encouraging words from my teachers dispelled my anxiety (sense of loneliness)/relieved my pressure/melted my heart/drove away the coldness of winter. ① Greatly motivated by my classmates, I was more determined to study harder. ② Seeing my “battle companions” fighting together with me, I was greatly encouraged and energized, determined to strive harder for my goal. 同伴作用陪伴激励学习收获 I achieved a lot and was praised by my parents 2020朝阳一模 1. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and gained more confidence in weak subjects. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me the thumbs up for my self- discipline. 2. When I proudly shared my harvest with my parents, they raised their thumbs up in praise of my autonomy and high efficiency. 3. With a great sense of pride bubbling up in my heart, I was confident that I could achieve more in study with strong self- discipline. 自我认可+父母肯定更加自信要点 细节 如何增补有效细节？每图定首尾主人公目标、阶段成果、心情 ？ 一棵树搞定描图、三条线牵引结构、仨问题打磨细节