高三新题型读后续写不同主题分析--学会道歉和感恩
板块一--例文(家长因为自己的错误道歉)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was a cool evening in spring. I was just finishing the dinner dishes when the phone rang. It
was unusual because our landline seldom rang. Nearly everyone we knew contacted us on our cell
phones.
“This is Janet Rhodes.” said a familiar voice that I struggled to place. That name seemed
familiar, too. I knew a lot of people, having lived on two coasts and in most major cities in
California for the past thirty years.
“I am calling because I need to apologize to you,” Janet stated. That’s when I suddenly
realized who she was.
“That day when I came into your classroom and chewed you out for disciplining my daughter,
I was way out of line. I know now that you were doing what was best for her. You were right.”
Twenty years earlier, it was only my second year of teaching. Janet’s daughter, Stephanie,
had acted out toward some of the other girls in the classroom, and I had made her stay in from
breaks between classes. I was kind and fair when I punished her. The truth is that I really liked
Stephanie, but she clearly didn’t like being disciplined. She told her mother, and Janet felt the
need to defend her child.
After school, she flew into my classroom and accused me of everything from being unfair to
playing favorites to not caring about my students. She was yelling so loudly that every teacher in
the building heard her accusations, including my principal.
Her words shocked me because none of her criticisms was true. I managed to keep from
crying while she stood in front of me, but as soon as she left the room, I broke down. I cried all
evening on and off through that sleepless night. I had once felt such joy teaching my kids, but now
I felt like I was under a microscope in my classroom. For the next few weeks, her words caused
me to second-guess everything I did with my students. I doubted my ability and even my own
heart. Despite how her mother had treated me, I knew I would discipline Stephanie again if she
acted out. It was the right thing to do.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
And now two decades later, the angry mother was apologizing to me.
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“Can you find it in your heart to forgive me?” Janet asked finally.
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【答案】And now, two decades later, the angry mother was a pologizing to me. The hurtful thing
had become ancient history to me, though her accusations affected me too deeply for much too
long. I’ve now learned to process criticisms much more quickly, accepting what’s true, dismissing
what’s not, and moving on with my mission in life. So, in essence, her apology wasn’t necessary
for my wellbeing because I had done the work of restoration on my own. I was grateful for that.
On the other hand, how much courage this lady had to make this call! It moved me.
“Can you find it in your heart to forgive me?” Janet asked finally. I responded that she was a
hero to me. After all these years, she could have just forgotten about that. But she went to such
effort to make things right. I was both blessed and impressed. We spent the rest of our short
conversation about Stephanie before we hung up. As I reflect on that evening, I am still in awe at
Janet’s growth, courage, and determination to apologize for the hurt she caused so many years ago.
Her apology truly was an unexpected blessing.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读文章可知,作者在一个凉爽的晚上接到一通电话,让作
者回忆起 20 年前,作者作为老师教训学生,遭到学生家长训斥的一件事,让作者记忆深刻
并且影响很深的一件事,这位家长 20 年后打来电话向作者道歉。
【详解】续写第一段开头为:二十年后的今天,那个愤怒的母亲正在向我道歉。…后面应该
写虽然这件事对作者影响深刻,但是二十年后这位母亲能鼓足勇气打电话道歉,让作者非常
感动。
续写第二段开头为:“你能从心底里原谅我吗?”珍妮特终于问道。…后面应该写作者把自
己对这位母亲的钦佩说出来,描述一些关于电话聊天内容,最后挂断电话后,作者陷入深深
的思考中,并且再次赞扬这位母亲的勇敢。
文章主题部分选用的是一般过去时,续写部分也用一般过去时,并且描述现在事实的时候,
也用了一般现在时,
【点睛】通篇时态把握准确;所给关键词使用的恰当并且高级,显示出较高的英语能力;文
章中还使用大量的复合句,为文章增加色彩和高级感,如 I’ve now learned to process criticisms
much more quickly, accepting what’s true, dismissing what’s not, and moving on with my mission
in life.(我现在学会了更快地处理批评,接受真实的,无视不真实的,继续完成我的人生使
命。) 这里的宾语从句的运用,显示高级的英语水平,精准掌握了从句使用的要领;续写
部分构思巧妙,衔接自然,思路清晰自然,表达完整,为一篇优秀的作品。
版块二---读后续写精彩词句集锦
板块三--能力提升(现学现用)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写
的词数应为 150 左右。
Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and
she ran out of the house angrily. She couldn’t help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the
scolding from her mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little
hungry and wished for something to eat, but it was not possible for her, since she had nothing with
her. She stood beside a stand for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business.
However, with no money in hand, she sighed and had to leave.
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked, “Hey, girl, you want to have the
noodles?”
“Oh, yes...but I don’t have money on me…” she replied.
“That’s nothing. I’ll treat you today,” said the man. “Come in.”
The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, whose smell was so attractive. As she was eating,
Jenny cried silently.
“What is it?” asked the man kindly.
“Nothing, actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears.
“Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother drove me out of
the house. She showed no care for me. She is so merciless compared to a stranger!!”
Hearing the words, the seller smiled, “Girl, do you really think so? I only gave you a bowl of
noodles and you thanked me a lot. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby.
Can you number the times she cooked for you? Have you expressed your gratitude to her?”
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shock; she remembered mother’s familiar face and
weathered hands. “Why did I not think of that? A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel
indebted, but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me.”
On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her
rudeness as soon as she arrived home.
注意:
1)所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;
2)续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好.
Paragraph 1:
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath.
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Paragraph 2:
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
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【答案】Paragraph 1: Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. When she knocked at
the door, she found the door was locked and her mother was not in. Tired and sad, she sat down in
front of the house. "Where could my mother be?" she wondered, "was she still angry with me?"
Again, the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness to her mother.
Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a
lot about her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began to roll down her cheeks.
Paragraph 2: A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw
the familiar face of her mother. "Here you come! I've been looking for you," she said, tired and
relieved. Jenny couldn't help throwing herself into her mother's arms. "Mum, I'm so sorry and
thank you for all you have done for me." She expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude.
Hearing this, her mother smiled patting her back gently.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】本文是一篇读后续写。读后续写一般要求学生阅读一篇记叙文,然后发挥想象,运
用自己所学的英语知识去续写一篇中心思想跟全文一致、合乎情理的记叙文。本文的中心思
想是:詹妮是家里的独子,与妈妈争吵后离家出走,在街上闲逛后,她饿了想吃东西,但是
没有钱,店主给了她一碗面,她非常感激,店主说她更应该感谢她的妈妈,最终詹妮回家向
妈妈表示了歉意。考生在写作的过程中要注意:要根据所给开头句子写出合理的内容。本文
要使用一般过去时。写作时注意准确地运用时态,使上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量
使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特
别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【点睛】本篇作文要点齐全,结构完整,条理清晰,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇, Tired
and sad, she sat down in front of the house.. 使 用 了 形 容 词 做 伴 随 状 语 ;
Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lo
t about her, she felt rather ashamed,and tears began to roll down her checks.使用现在分词作
状语,that 引导同位语从句。文章熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分,使整个文章结构紧凑,
很好地完成了写作任务。