Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I
remember his face clearly, especially his eyes. As he had yellow spots on his eyes we
called him Spotty. He would have been a stray (流浪) dog, until he came to me.
I was seven years old. My dad had just got a new job in Nasik. We had moved into a
rented house. It was raining very heavily on the day we moved.
It was a cold dark night. We had our meal and went to sleep. Somehow in the
midnight I heard some strange sounds outside the main door. I gathered courage and
looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I saw outside.
There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put outside
the door. It was wet and trembling. At first it was difficult to see the little one. It was the
yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence.
It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air outside and it had manage
d to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat. Was it sick or injured?
I felt pity for the poor soul. I went in and came out with an old towel. I went near the
innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had become dry. I took
him into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen blanket and a small pillow. He
seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new bed as he went to sleep immediately.
The next morning, everyone in the family came to know about the unusual guest. "
Shall we keep him with us?" I questioned my mom.
Like any other parents would, my parents first totally refused my idea but my sister
and I convinced them to keep Spotty.
Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.
Para. 1: One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg.Para. 2: Almost a
year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.
评分标准
1 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度
2 内容的丰富性和对创新性
3 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性
4 上下文的连贯性
A. Narration（记叙文）
B. Argumentation （议论文）
C. Exposition （说明文）
Writing style
a story (when, where, who, what, how)
审体裁：记叙文
审时态：一般过去时
审前文大意以及要点
Summary
a story (when, where, who, what, how)
Combine the 6 elements
Though my my memories of Spotty begin to fade
away ,I still miss him sometimes.One dark night,
finding this little poor creature seeking warmth from
the doormat, I took her home and care for him.
With the effort of my sister,he became a member of
my family.
Step2.read for plots and feelings
when what emotions
Now
aged 7
feel nostalgic
for it
remember clearly
moved into a rented house poor/
impoverished
one cold dark night,
at middle night
found the puppy, took it
home,cared for it
sympathetic
about it . love it
The next morning,
questioned my mom,adopted it happy
Step3.read for language
1.Somehow in the midnight I heard some strange
sounds outside the main door. I gathered courage and
looked out through the window and I was really
amused with what I saw outside.
2.I went in and came out with an old towel. I went
near the innocent one and held it in my hand and
wiped the puppy till he had become dry. I took him
into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen
blanket and a small pillow.
语言特点：1）注重动作描写与人物描写 2）注重环境描写
writing(provided words and sentences
Who:
I .Spotty, My family
What :
broke his leg, barked breathlessly ,died ,disappeared
Where: ...
Theme:Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes.last last sentence :Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.Para. 1: One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken legPara. 2: Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.
1.重点写dog还是I？
2.动作描写词汇
3.心理描写词汇
1
1
1
1
One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg. Not until he came to me
did I notice his lame leg still bleeding. With tears full of my eyes I carried him in my
arms immediately, walking towards my mother. I had thought that my mother would be
kind enough to bandage his wound, but to my surprise, she turned a deaf ear to what I
wanted her to do and went off in a huff. It was then that my sister happened to come in
time, who helped me to apply some household medicine to his wound. Spotty licked our
hands as if he wanted to thank us because of our help. Soon, Spotty recovered
completely.
para2
Almost a year later,one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.We came out and saw
that he was barking continuously heading somewhere.After some time Spotty became quiet.I
patted him on his back and came inside.The next day morning,my heart skipped a beat when I
didn't see Spotty.I searched for him in each and every corner but he was nowhere. And this time
he had gone and would never come back.I cried and waited for him.We waited for one long
week.But there were no signs of him.Then one day my Dad got transferred to Mumbai.We
shifted back to Mumbai.What would have happened to Spotty? Would he have died?These were
the only questions in my mind,but they all remained unanswered forever.（图片）
Para. 1: One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with
a broken leg.
Para. 2: Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty
barking breathlessly.
1
1
James was badly injured and he couldn’t move a bit. He could only
lie there still, hoping some kind man could aid him. Cold and
injured, James gradually lost his consciousness. About 10 minutes
later, another car draw near. When the driver, Steven, saw someone
lying in the ditch by the roadside, he immediately stopped and
went out of the car. He put one finger in front of James’s nose and
felt the breath, knowing he was still living. He shouldered him up
and carried him into his car.Having wrapped a warm blanket
around James, he took off his own coat and covered James. After
that he headed for the nearby hospital. Because of the warmth of
the blanket and Steven’s coat, James slowly came to life. Knowing
it was the young man who had saved him, he erupted into
tears,saying “Thank you, kind boy! Without you I would have
died! ” While for Steven it is a small case, we should always
remember these who have helped us when we are in great need.
John was studying in his room when he heard screaming. When he and
his father rushed outside, a man ran from the scene. They discovered
that Anne Slade, mother of three, had been stabbed repeatedly with a
knife. She was lying in her front garden bleeding very heavily. Her
hands had almost been cut off.It was John's quick action and knowledge
of first aid that saved Ms Slade's life. He immediately asked a number
of nearby people for bandages, but when nobody could put their hands
on any, his father got some tea towels and tape from their house. John
used these to treat the most severe injuries to Ms Slade's hands. He
slowed the bleeding by applying pressure to the wounds until the police
and ambulance arrived.（人教选修5 unit5 using language）
第一段第一句：Spotty回家，断了一条腿。
作者当时的反应是什么?
看到了什么?
Spotty 状态描写。
为什么会断了一条腿?（最难处理）
作者一定是误解了，对Spotty有过激的反应。
到处寻找，但找不到。
一段时间以后得知真相。
第二段第一句：一年以后，我们听到Spotty在气喘吁吁地叫。
看到了什么（骨瘦如柴)?
为什么spotty叫起来气喘吁吁?
看到spotty的情感反应?做了什么?
为什么spotty 回来?（最难处理）
心理的感受是什么?为此做了什么?
但几天以后，spotty 还是死了。
作者的感情与感悟，如何与第一段呼应
卷面；
段落，字数；
衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间）
故事发展
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
改卷经验
出现的问题
衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间）
故事发展
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
出现的问题
衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间）
故事发展
童话式的
寓言式的
无厘头式的
戏剧式的
出现的问题
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
1 afraid; nervous; frightened
2 catch, catch up, catch up with
3 “Get into the car quickly, man!” said Paul.
4 发动汽车
5 狼追我们
6汽油不够
7 自行车上跳下
8 call ?/ call for? the police
出现的问题
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
He saw the wolf’s face near him. He used his fist
hit the face of the wolf strongly.
Seeing the wolf’s face so close to him, he hit it
with all his strength/ heavily using his fist.
出现的问题
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
基本语法错误
不规则动词（P106）
though/but
dangerous/ in danger
thanks to/ thanks
出现的问题
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
1 “Hey, friend! Calm down! Jump out of your
bicycle and get into our car!” shouted Paul.
2 A few minutes later, the police arrived.
3 妻子带着孩子过来了。
4 送医院去了。
5 骑自行车一会儿就到家了。
描写恐惧
¬Though he was safe, he still felt the dread stopping
the passage of air to his lung, with his legs trembling.
¬At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I felt so scared that
my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.
¬At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I froze with terror,
too scared to move an inch.
¬At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a
strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating.
¬It was really a moment of life and death. Sitting in
the car, he still felt his heart beating wildly.
¬He sat there, too frightened to utter a word.
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