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第二节 读后续写 (满分25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 There Are No Vans To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City. Several years ago I was in New York City with my newly married wife during Thanksgiving.She was sad because we were not with our family.Normally she would be home decorating the house for Christmas, but we were stuck here in a hotel room.I said, “Honey, look, why don’t we decorate some lives today instead of some trees?” When I told her what I always do on Thanksgiving, she got excited.I said, “Let’s go someplace where we can really appreciate who we are, what we are able to do and what we can really give.Let’s go to the poor neighborhood Harlem and feed some people there in need. We’ll go buy enough food for six or seven families for 30 days.We’ve got enough.Let’s go do it!” We started by getting a van (货车), but there seemed no vans in all of New York City.The rent-a-car places were all out of vans. My wife was disappointed, and I said, “Look, the bottom line is that if we want something, we can make it happen! All we have to do is take action.There are plenty of vans here in New York City.Look down at the street. Do you see all those vans? Let’s go get one!” My wife agreed and we took action. Predict the story There Are No Vans Ø What are we looking for? Ø Do we find what we want? Why? Ø What do you think the story is about? To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City. To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City. What would I usual do for my Thanksgiving ritual?What do I get from my Thanksgiving ritual? To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City. To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City. A general point: I received more from my Thanksgiving ritual Example: an experience in New York City Know the story--elementsCharacters Time Place Event an experience in New York City to search vans. my wife, I, the driver during Thanksgiving (the 4th Thursday in Nov.) New York City Ø Why were we in need of vans? Ø What does the writer intend to tell us? p Little people can make a big difference. p A friend in need is a friend indeed. p Nothing is impossible for a willing heart. p One good turn deserves another. p ... kindness overt plot Setting Inciting incident Rising action Climax Falling actionResolution Denouement Events A. We needed a van for loading supplies. B. We tried our chance at the street. C. We went to the rent-a-car places for getting a van, but in vain. D. Stuck in a hotel during Thanksgiving we decided to help people in Harlem. D A C B Know the story--plot Covert plot Time Events Mood Before we made a plan My wife and I were _____ in a hotel She felt ________ When we made a plan I told her _______________ We decided to _____________ She got ________ After we made a plan We started by getting _____, but found ___________________; I advised to ______________ She was ________ stuck sad my Thanksgiving ritual excited go to the poor Harlem and buy food for them a van there seemed no vans available disappointed take a chance in the streets Weave the story Paragraph 1: We tried stopping vans as they were driving down the street. _______________________________ _______________________________________ _______________________________________ Paragraph 2: Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes. ________________________________________ ________________________________________ 划线词分类 Character wife Setting Thanksgiving; food; experience; Harlem; in need; van Action buy; knock Mood disappointed Event: Mood: Event: Mood: stuck told started sad excited disappointed attempt to get a van---in vain disappointed/hopeless succeed in getting a van delighted/excited 话题词块 / 表达 Ø 表示失望： p 叹气 She sighed heavily. After several fruitless attempts, my wife let out a long sigh. p 跺脚 My wife stamped her foot in despair. Staring at the vans zooming past us, my wife trembled with rage. p 皱眉 “Who can we turn help to?” my wife murmured with a fierce frown.紧皱眉头 p 颤抖 My wife gave a miserable shrug. 沮丧地耸了耸肩p 耸肩 p 目光呆滞 She looked blank in a moment. 目光呆滞 p 蹒跚 With a dazed look on our face, we staggered away. p 苦笑 She smiled a sad smile. p 失望地看My wife darted/cast a frustrated look at me. p 低头 I looked my wife in desperation. 绝望地 She bowed her head and said nothing. p 摇头 She just shook her head in hopelessness. p 哭 Tears of grievance (委屈) /ˈɡriːvəns/ came into her eyes when she saw them left. Ø 表示失望： p 心跳加快 My heart thumped fiercely in my chest, tension overwhelming me entirely in its power. p 无灵主语 n All at once a feeling of hopelessness swept through me. n A strong feeling of failure beat me out of breath. n A sense of disappointment flooded in my heart, and hopelessness frequently echoed my brain. n After a long waiting, disappointment accumulated in our heart. n Disappointment mingled with frustration growing inside me. n Disappointment swallowed my wife. She sat on the ground and didn't utter a single word. n A sense of disappointment crept upon me. n The unsuccessful attempts cast a cloud of gloom over our face. more expressions to show disappointment Ø 表示高兴： p 尖叫 Hearing the words, my wife shrieked with excitement 激动的尖叫 p 心跳 My heart thumped with excitement. 兴奋地心直跳 (表高兴难以置信) With a shriek of delight, She hugged me.p 拥抱 p 握手 I took hold of his hands gratefully. p 点头 We nodded gratefully. p 笑 Her eyes twinkled and her lips broke into a broad smile. p 跳起来 Hearing the simple yes, we all jumped with joy. p 哭 We shed tears with joy. p 松口气 At this moment, we breathed a sigh of relief. l we were wild with excitement/joy. l we could hardly contain our excitement. l we were delighted beyond description. l we were floating on air. l we were beside ourselves(极度兴奋) with excitement. l we beam with excitement. l Our face lit up. l Our heart was thundering with excitement. more expressions to show excitement • A wave of happiness swept over us. • A surge of excitement flashed into my heart. • A sense of warmth flowed in my body. Ø 表示努力： p 用让步状语从句 n We kept on struggling forward, even though ___________________ n While _______________________________________, we never lost hope for another try. we knew it was hopeless. the passing drivers zoomed past us without a stop n _________________________________(as) , we continued to wave at the passing cars stubbornly. n We told ourselves repeatedly ________________________ (however), we wouldn't give in to setbacks. Disappointed and fatigued as we were however painstaking the task was, n In spite of ________________________, we still believed in miracles.countless failures p 用非谓语 Ø 表示努力： n __________________________________________(be refused), we decided to try one last time. Having been refused many times n __________________________________(咬紧牙关), we pushed on. Gritting our teeth p 用强调句 n __________________________________(妻子的鼓励) gave me an extra burst of energy. 迸发出额外的能量 It was my wife's encouragement that p 用倒装结构 n _____________________________________________ (never) Never would we be defeated by the plight Ø 表示努力： p 用虚拟语气 n We summoned up/collected up/ plucked up/mustered up/gathered our courage and yelled at the top of our voice for the fear that __________ ___________ we would miss a van. p 用谚语 n Our heart sank at the thought of our failure to get a van, but we told ourselves ________________________________.(绝不半途而废)never do anything by halves p 用“the+比较级， the+比较级” n We constantly convince ourselves that the more _________________ ___________________________________. efforts we put in, the luckier we would be. 常见问题 未理清人物 关系： Harlem 是地 点不是人物 无用的环境描写： colorful与下文故 事发展脱节。 书写较差 故事太过冗 长拖沓 未按要求划线 优秀习作 22.5 本文抓住了故事的中 心矛盾——我们 的努 力和过往车辆的 “无 情” (turn a blind eye/sped pass/ drown our hope)构思和推动 情节; 用无灵主语和 外貌描写(fingers numbed/ throatchocked/red- rimmed )侧面烘托了 “我们”的无奈和无助。 结尾段用了时间状 语 immediately/ then/that night/ when等有序地推进 故事发展；并且用外 部寒冷的环境跟内心 感到的温暖和炽热作 对比深化主题“at least we can offer our kindness” 优秀习作 22 该文续写第一段用了 非谓语 leaving us standing on the streets /waiting for a miracle 和形容词状语 alone/unwilling 生动、 形象地勾勒出了 现实 的“冷酷” 和 我们的 “执着”，描写了故事 该有的曲折，合理地 推动情节的发展。 该文续写第二段用 了形象动词 hugged/discussed/ decided/knocked/d elivered/smiled等继 续推进故事发展； 同时用了一系列情 绪词 anxiety/tiredness/ excitedly/joyful等向 读者传递主人公由 悲转喜的情景 。 优秀习作 该文使用了非谓 语（waving at...;） only to...；无灵主 语 (disappointment crept onto my face; The gathering gloom even deepened my anxiety) 牵动故事发展 文章第二段用 了with复合结构 “with butterflies in my stomach” 、 非谓语 “Looking at ...”、独立主格 结构 “tears rolling down our cheeks” 形象地展示了故 事结尾 传递爱心 的感人至深的一 幕。 A possible version: Para1：We tried stopping vans as they were driving down the street. I learned something about New York drivers that day: They don’t stop; they speed up. Then we tried waiting by the light. We’d go over, knock on the window and the driver would roll it down, looking at us in alarm, and I’d ask if he would drive us to Harlem so we could help some people. Every time the driver would look away quickly, furiously roll up the window and pull away without saying anything. My wife was ready to give up, but I said, “It’s the law of averages: somebody is going to say yes.” Para 2: Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes. We were wild with joy and climbed onto the van. Upon arrival, he led us to a store where we bought lots of food and some baskets. Together we packed them up, carried them onto the van and went to buildings where there were even people living without electricity. It was a truly fulfilling experience to make even a small difference. You see, you can make anything happen if you commit to it and take action. Miracles like this happen every day—even in a city where “there are no vans.”