阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150
左右。
We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude.
Growing up, I wanted to be just like my mom. Kind and caring, she always seemed to make people
comfortable in her presence. For years she was a volunteer in our community. I loved going to the local nursing
home to help with her until I hit my preteen years. Suddenly, I was too caught up in my adolescent world to
worry about helping others.
One particular summer day when I was twelve, Mom came into my room and told me to get up and meet
her at the car. I had planned to spend the day at the lake with friends. Why did she have to ruin everything?
Eventually, I made my way outside. I imagined the lake water cooling my skin. Annoyed, I climbed into the car
and slammed the door shut. I sat in silence, too upset to make a conversation.
“Tasha, would you like to know where we are going?” Mom asked calmly.
“I guess. . . ” I murmured under my breath.
“Sweetheart, we are going to a children's shelter, I have been there before and I think it would benefit
you，”she explained.
I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach. How was I supposed to help there?
When we reached the shelter, I was rather surprised. It was a large white Victorian home. As we
approached the large front porch, wind bells played a calming tune while trees and blossoms welcomed us.
Maybe this wasn't going to be so bad.
Mom rang the doorbell. The door flew open and we were led to the front room , where all of the children
were playing. Toys were spread out across the floor. I noticed a baby whose body was scarred with wounds. The
majority of the children had noticeable physical scars（伤疤）such as cuts, scratches and bums. What a terrible
life they had had before they moved here! My heart sank.
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答案解析
As I was looking around, I felt a gentle pull on my shirt.Looking down, I saw a little girl with brown eyes
looking up at me. Her angelic face beamed , though, as I could see, there were some scow on her little arms. "Hi.
I'm Ashley. You wanna play dolts with me？" she asked. I looked over and saw Mom nodding to me with a
smile． I bent toward Ashley and whispered，"Sure． I'd love to．" Her tiny hand reached up and took mine，
and we walked toward the doll house． Our time together brought her great joy and fun and she also made my
day．（作者和 Ashley 一起去玩具店）
I returned to the shelter with Mom several times. During those visits, some of the children including Ashley
shared their troubled pasts with me in great detail． I felt sore for what had happened to them and treasured the
friendship between us．【高分句型一】I would like to do everything in my power to help the children there．At
the same time， I leaned to be grateful for all that I had． It was a profound time in my young life that I will
never forget． It was Mom who taught me the valuable lesson that summer．【高分句型二】（作者希望能帮
助这些孩子）
解析
高分句型一：I felt sore for what had happened to them and treasured the friendship between us．
译文：我为他们的遭遇感到痛心，珍惜我们之间的友谊．
分析：what 引导宾语从句．
高分句型二：It was Mom who taught me the valuable lesson that summer．
译文：那年夏天是妈妈给我上了宝贵的一课．
分析：这句话使用强调句．
Evangelion 10:25:00
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的母亲善良又乐于照顾别人，只要她在的时候别人就会感到很舒服，她一
直在社区做志愿者。作
者通过一次去避难所的经历，自己青春期那种不愿帮助别人的心理变成了对妈妈的敬佩，妈妈教会作者
要感恩。我们经常认为
理所应当的事情，其实最值得感恩。
【详解】续写部分分为两段，都没有给开头，这就为写作提供了更广阔的发挥空间，但同时对于习惯命
题作文的学生来说，也是挑战。
第一段可以写作者到达避难后的所看、所听、所思和所想，第二段可以写作者多次到避难所的经历，从
中学到、得到和感受到
的东西，升华文章开头的主旨：我们经常认为理所应当的事情，其实最值得感恩。
【示睛】该篇作文在逻辑、语言方面做到了平衡、全面。
首先，在逻辑上，该篇文章做到了合理合情：从开始乐意陪伴妈妈到青春期时对妈妈所做事情的不情愿
和恼怒，在续写时通过
自己亲历避难所的人和事，感悟到一些道理，升华主旨，续写情节发展符合给出的开头所限定的情景要
求。
在语言上，这篇文章活用了许多小词，使文章的可读性大大增加。例如，在续写部分：looking around,looked
down,looking over,reached up,with a smile,made my day 等等，使用了非调语动词的语法：some of the
children including
Ashley shared their troubled pasts with me in great detail.,表达精练。最后定语从句：It was a profound time in
my young life
that I will never forget.和强调句：It was Mom who taught me the valuable lesson that summer.的使用，升华了
主旨，画龙点晴
读后续写积累 42 套
I.原文积累
人物描写
1. Growing up, I wanted to be just like my mom.
2. Kind and caring, she always seemed to make people comfortable in her presence.
3. Toys were spread out across the floor. I noticed a baby whose body was scarred with wounds.
4. The majority of the children had noticeable physical scars（伤疤）such as cuts, scratches and bums.
5. What a terrible life they had had before they moved here! My heart sank.
烦恼的心情描写
6. Why did she have to ruin everything?
7. Annoyed, I climbed into the car and slammed the door shut. I sat in silence, too upset to make a
conversation.
8. I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach. How was I supposed to help there?
9. Suddenly, I was too caught up in my adolescent world to worry about helping others.
其他语料积累
10. We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude.
11. I loved going to the local nursing home to help with her until I hit my preteen years.
12. As we approached the large front porch, wind bells played a calming tune while trees and blossoms
welcomed us. Maybe this wasn't going to be so bad.
II.其他积累
一.蹲
1.squat[skw?t]~ (down) to sit on your heels with your knees bent up close to your body 蹲坐；蹲 If you squat,
you lower yourself towards the ground, balancing on your feet with your legs bent.
2.crouch。;If you are crouching, your legs are bent under you so that you are close to the ground and leaning
forward slightly.
● We were crouching in the bushes... 我们蹲在树丛里。
● I crouched on the ground... 我蹲在地上。
② (VERB) 俯身接近 If you crouch over something, you bend over it so that you are very near to it.
● Meantime, here I crouch over a cup of tea in my unheated study. 与此同时，在没有暖气的书房里，我只
能就着一杯茶取暖。
3.hunker : sit on one's heels;蹲;蹲下;蹲坐 If you hunker down, you bend your knees so that you are in a low
position, balancing on your feet.
4.Bend down：
5.stoop down! to bend your body forwards and downwards 俯身；弯腰 ,蹲下
6.bend to a squat
1.老人蹲在炉火旁.The old man squatted down by the fire.
2.他蹲下把身子藏在紊乱的叶丛中.He crouched down among the tangled foliage.
3.老人蹲在炉火旁.The old man squatted (down) by the fire.
4.我蹲在沙发后面.I crouched behind the sofa.
5.他们蜷著身子蹲在桌子底下.They crouched under the table.
6.They hunkered down to avoid the icy wind.他们弯腰躲避寒风
7.She stooped down to pick up the child.她俯身抱起孩子她蹲下来.
kneel; drop to one's knees; fall on one's knees; kneel down; went down on one's knees .
二. 如何描述快乐
1.I'm ecstatic[ɪkˈstætɪk.我高兴得忘乎所以了。
2.I'm thrilled.我太激动了。
3.I'm in heaven.我好象到了天堂。
4.I've never been this happy.我从没有这么高兴过。
5.I'm walking on air.我高兴得飘飘欲仙。
6.I jumped for joy.我高兴得跳了起来。
7.This is too good to be true.这简直不敢让人相信。
8.Nothing could be more wonderful.没有比这更让人高兴的了
9.I was wild with joy
10.I was pleased beyond description.
11.Joy welled up inside her.
12.I was floating on air
13.A wild gaiety [ˈgeɪəti] (快乐）took hold of her.
14.The smile on her face shone like a diamond.
15.A simile of understanding flashed across his face.
16.A ripple of excitement ran through them.
17.Laughter lingered around the room.
18.His eyes twinkled with pleasure.
19.Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds and lips held in a steady smile.
20.She wore a shining smile on her face.
21.Her smile lit up the whole room.
22.She shed tears of joy.
23.Her eyes were sparkling like diamonds.
24.She was overflowing with happiness.
25.Her flushed face was shining with excitement
26.Amusement gleamed in his face
27.My heart throbbed with excitement. 我的心兴奋得直跳。
28. Her heart bounded with joy. 她高兴得心头砰砰直跳。
29. His voice thrilled with joy. 他高兴得声音发抖。
30. It’s a big pleasant surprise. 这真是个惊喜。
31. He give himself over to his rapture. 他沉浸在巨大的欢乐之中。
32. They were all lost in happiness. 他们沉浸在欢乐之中。
33. He was in quite a state about the matter.他对这事非常激动。
34. Words can’t convey how delighted I was. 言语无法表达我们内心的喜悦。
35. I can hardly express my gratitude to you for your help. 对于你的帮助，我难以表达我的感激之情。
36. He seemed to wake up out of a dream. 他好象从梦中惊醒。
37. He is half in fear and half in pleasure. 他既害怕又高兴。
44. The good news bucked us all up. 这个好消息使我们大家欢欣鼓舞。
45. You get a chance like this only once in a blue moon. 这可是个千载难逢的机会。
47. The information made flowers blossom in the hearts of the people present. 这消息使在场的人心花怒放。
48. She was pleased and surprised with the quickness and surely of his mind. 对于他的敏捷、准确的头脑，
她感到又惊又喜。
三.练习
①翻译：“当妈妈亲吻他时，小婴儿开心极了。”
1、用最基本的句型概括描述。
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2、请在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，使句子变得丰满。注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理性。
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2)______________________________________
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②翻译：“当主持人宣布她获奖时，她激动极了。”
1、用最基本的句型概括描述。
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2、请在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，使句子变得丰满。注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理性。
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2)______________________________________
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③填入漂亮的表达。
1)After what seemed a long time, she could hear a voice somewhere at a distance. _________(她两眼放光), she
struggled to her feet and shouted, “I’m here!”
2)______________________(开心和放松的眼泪喷涌而出) as they finally held each other tightly.
3)He rushed to her and hugged his wife firmly. _______________(他们那充满幸福的哭声)broke the silence in
the forest.
4)With the door open, Tom ran out. Seeing Jane, he was so excited and ___________(控制不住开心). He
hugged Jane tightly.
参考答案：
1.When his mother kissed him, the baby was happy/delighted/full of joy.
2.1) When his mother kissed him on the cheek, it seemed as if the baby were on top of the world.
(非常开心)
2) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his face beamed and his bright smile lit up the
room. (眉开眼笑；笑容照亮房间)
3) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his eyes danced with joy and sweetness. (欢
欣雀跃)
1.When the host announced that she won the prize, she felt thrilled.
2. 1) When the host announced that she won the prize, her eyes twinkled with excitement.（激动
得两眼放光）
2) When the host announced that she won the prize, her heart was thumping with excitement.
(激动得心砰砰跳)
3) When the host announced that she won the prize, a wide excitement took hold of her. (兴奋
不能自已)
1)With her eyes sparkling2) Tears of joy and relief welled up3) Their cry which was full of
happiness4) couldn’t contain his joy
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